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Facing a bit of a writing and time block right now, so I put up this
part of the next chap, get some feedback on it from ppl.



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"Roger, Boat-1, we have you, five-by-five. You are cleared to land."

"Roger, Daanan. ETA, 45 minutes, mark."

"Radio, Conn. Our... guests are arriving, please notify the Captain. Harrier Flight, you are cleared to land as soon as Boat-1 has cleared the deck."

"Roger." Harrrier Flight responded. "You're welcome for the escort, Boat-1." Thanks for nothing, he didn't add. "Bloody babysitting job, this was NOT what I signed on for. I should be shooting up things, not making sure some idiot didn't get lost on an overwater flight!"

* * *

Mardukas took the message himself. So, they've finally decided to grace us with their presence he thought sarcastically. Took them bloody well long enough. Our turn to face the music now, so no sense in delaying it.

"Chief, you have the conn until further notice. When Boat-1 lands, direct our guests to the main briefing room."

"Aye, sir. Give 'em hell, sir!"

Mardukas nodded his appreciation for the vote of confidence. Leaving the Radio compartment, he made straight for Major Kalinin's office.

"Ah, Commander Mardukas. Punctual as ever, I see." Kalinin greeted his counterpart aboard ship with a handshake and a rare smile. "I presume this visit is about business. Please, sit."

" I wish I could be casual about this, Major Kalinin, but our guests are arriving in 45 minutes. The inquiry will no doubt begin shortly after that."

Kalinin sat down heavily. Turning around, he opened his private safe, producing a bottle of vodka. Pouring two half-glasses, he offered one to Mardukas. "No, I cannot my friend. And surely you know the regulations."

"Come, my good friend. A drink should never be taken alone, as I'm sure you English yourselves know that." Kalinin smiled.

Sighing heavily, Mardukas sat down and took the proffered glass. A long serving officer in the Royal Navy, his own family having three generations serving in the blue uniform, whose 'wet ship' policy had been in effect for over 6 centuries, it was by Captain Tessa's command that forbade drink aboard ship except on the odd social occasion. The fine alcohol rolled its way down his throat, making him cough.

"Still trying to outdrink a Russian?" Kalinin mused.

"I never claimed to try. How is your son?"

"Ashore. How is your daughter?"

"Aboard. Cheers!" Both men broke out laughing.

Their private joke, it was good for breaking tense atmospheres, but also reflected their roles aboard ship. Save for Mithril, they had no where else to go in the world. To Mother Russia, Kalinin was no longer a welcomed son, while to Jolly Olde England, Mardukas was an embarassment. They lived with their decisions, but never regretted them.
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Not even a hint of Russian there? I expected at least the odd "Tovarich" or 2.
Remember kids, trying to start Armageddon is dangerous. Do not try it at home.

[14:57] Silver Lynxy: Ack. You couldn't see that?
[14:57] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: Nope, cant see a thing.
[14:57] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: Not using MSN remember?
[14:57] Silver Lynxy: Oh right. You're one of those Trillian people, aren't you?
[14:58] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: trillian people? =.= What are we, an ethnicity now?
[15:00] Silver Lynxy: Yes. An evil race.

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About the only Russian words I know are Nyet and nekulturny

...but I got the Harrier boys in, sorta
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Not even dosvidanya? :lol:

And yes, you got the flyboys mixed in... though they don't really do anything. :sweat:

And do you think you could come up with a more... interesting name than boat-1?


*won't bother starting with minor corrections such as grammar and spelling*
Remember kids, trying to start Armageddon is dangerous. Do not try it at home.

[14:57] Silver Lynxy: Ack. You couldn't see that?
[14:57] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: Nope, cant see a thing.
[14:57] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: Not using MSN remember?
[14:57] Silver Lynxy: Oh right. You're one of those Trillian people, aren't you?
[14:58] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: trillian people? =.= What are we, an ethnicity now?
[15:00] Silver Lynxy: Yes. An evil race.

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Sooo... other than that, do you have any more scintillatingly brilliant
insights into how it's going so far, Katyusha? :-D
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HELLFIRE wrote:Sooo... other than that, do you have any more scintillatingly brilliant
insights into how it's going so far, Katyusha? :-D
Does he ever?

:roll:

Helly-chan, I'm no military otaku, and so, now I'm lost. I keep trying to find my bearings, but ch 3 was all about people I didn't recognize. Great action sequence, though!

I guess I'm just missing it. :(

*hugs* Keep going!!! :)

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He's liberally introducing new characters. Military-otaku-ism at it's finest also rears it's head. :-D

Anyway, notes for you less fortunate people not to be blessed with the ability to be a walking, talking, mil. tech spec manual.


F-14 - The workhorse of US Naval aviation. It's a longe, all weather, fleet-defense interceptor. It's primary armament is the AIM-54 phoenix, the world's longest ranged Air-to-Air missile. While it was immortalized as a fighter in the movie "Top Gun", an Tomcat pilot that turns and burns is actually a stupid one. Their motto is "Shoot and scoot". Though VF-41 has officially adopted "If it flies, it dies."


Rhino - The F/A-18E/F Super Hornet. It's supposed to be a replacement for the F-14. The nickname "Plastic Bug" is used more often however, since "Rhino" was also the old service nick for the old F-4 "Phantom" fighter/interceptors.


OPEVAL - Operational Evaluation. Should be self explanatory.


VF-103 "Jolly Rogers" - US Navy fighter/interceptor squadron. Currently flies the F-14D. Assigned to the USS Nimitz airwing.


IRSTS - Infrared Search and Tracking System. The F-14 has a long-range camera system that allows it to identify enemy aircraft visually from 20-40 nautical miles, depending on size. This is part of the system. Namely, the part used in low-light conditions, since it usses IR emissions to form an image rather than a regular camera. The MiG-29, Eurofighter Typhoon, Su-27, and most new fighters also carry it.

E-2C Hawkeye - A four plane squadron of Hawkeyes is stationed aboard every US aircraft carrier, and they may well be the most important planes on the ship. Flying at high altitude, the Hawkeye extends the range of the carrier's sensors and allows a battle group to detect the approach of low flying enemy aircraft in sufficient time to deal with them. This mission is called Airborne Early Warning (AEW). The carrier usually maintains one Hawkeye in the air at all times. If a combat situation develops, then the remainder of the squadron would be launched. Sporting a distinctive 24 foot diameter, saucer shaped radar dome, the Hawkeye is worth every bit of its $50 million cost. The Soviet Moss and Mainstay are also AEW aircraft, although they are much larger and are land based. The E-3 Sentry has a much better radar system however.


Varyag - During the "bad old days" of the cold war, Varyag was supposed to be a Russian carrier. Supposedly, it was never fully completed.


Sovremenny class DDG - The Sovremennyy's primary role is as an anti-surface warfare and escort vessel. However, because its new supersonic seaskimming SSM has a relatively short range, it is essential for this ship to maneuver close to its target. At the same time, its AAW system is also short ranged, meaning that it will have to stay dangerously close to the ships it's intended to protect. The Sovremennyy's ASW capability is minimal. In comparison, no Western navy builds destroyers with such powerful anti-surface weapons but so little ASW armament. Probable cost in US terms would be $200 million. The US Charles F. Adams is a good match in capability, although the Sovremennyy is a newer design.


Sov - Short for "Soviet".


six - Short for "Six o'clock", a Military term for "Directly behind you". Other terms include "twelve" (right in front of you), "niner" (to your left) and "three" (your right).


MiG-29K - Naval variant of the famous Mikoyan-Gurevich MiG-29. It is very maneuverable, and can carry a large missile load. Its nearest Western counterparts are the F-16 Falcon and the F/A-18 Hornet, and it would be a match for either. The Fulcrum would be used to escort strike aircraft, intercept incoming air targets, achieve/maintain air superiority and attack ground targets. As of late 1987, despite the cost, the Soviets had built over 350 of these fighters.

R-73s - NATO Codename: "Archer". The R-73 is considered one of the best AAMs in the world, with reportedly superior performance to the American equivalent, the AIM-9 Sidewinder. Official estimates give it a range of 8 nautical miles, and it is guided by an Infrared Seeker system.


Americanski - American. Go figure.


Hummer - Service nickname for the E-2. Interchangeable with "UFO plane".


USS Carl Vinson - US Navy Nimitz class Aircraft Carrier. Hull number CVN-70.


CVBG - Aircraft Carrier Battle Group


Ivan(s) - The Russians/A Russian



On another note, HELLFIRE forgot a few minor details about Russian names. Russkiyes tend to use a system like "GivenName Father's-name-vich FamilyName". Usually terms out like "Pavel Dmitrivich Takorev" or something close to that system. Most Russians I've met rarely call each other by family name. As for the Russian military, well... it HAS been known for it's lack of discipline.
Remember kids, trying to start Armageddon is dangerous. Do not try it at home.

[14:57] Silver Lynxy: Ack. You couldn't see that?
[14:57] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: Nope, cant see a thing.
[14:57] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: Not using MSN remember?
[14:57] Silver Lynxy: Oh right. You're one of those Trillian people, aren't you?
[14:58] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: trillian people? =.= What are we, an ethnicity now?
[15:00] Silver Lynxy: Yes. An evil race.

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thats IT!! mister .... no more eating tech manuals for breakfast .. ;)
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"Can I help you?, "you know this section is.." she broke off her sentence as the man walked towards her and nodded, "I think you can Captain".
Tessa looked down, "I haven't been called Captain in 4 years," Wha..what do you want?"
He gave her a devious grin, "I'm here to make sure you keep your promise."
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@blackrose
WB again. Yeah, I'm digressing from the Sagara/Chidori aspect
of the story to focus on MITHRIL, Tessa, Mardukas, and Kalinin
some more. This chap is SUPPOSED to be a setup towards that.
That, and to go alittle gunbunny. Next chap I'm going back to
our beloved FMP chars... check the preview above

@Katyusha
Thanks for the GunBunny expansion, but that's why there's
Google you know :-D
Katyusha wrote:On another note, HELLFIRE forgot a few minor details about Russian names. Russkiyes tend to use a system like "GivenName Father's-name-vich FamilyName". Usually terms out like "Pavel Dmitrivich Takorev" or something close to that system. Most Russians I've met rarely call each other by family name. As for the Russian military, well... it HAS been known for it's lack of discipline.
I'm going by some old high school Russian literature studies which
said that Russian names also go by the suffix -nov (son of) and -nova
(daughter of). I DID already admit to being nearly ignorant of
the Russian language, right? :? Sue me...
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HELLFIRE wrote:@blackrose
WB again. Yeah, I'm digressing from the Sagara/Chidori aspect
of the story to focus on MITHRIL, Tessa, Mardukas, and Kalinin
some more.
Oh! I have no problem with that at all. I just get confused when there's an entire chapter of people I don't know. My Falter fanfic... I'm having trouble deciding about the scene I have written if I should put it first or wait to have more of an introduction to the storyline before throwing in some girl we don't know. One part of me says no, start with recognizable characters, the other part says, well, they kinda did the same thing at the beginning of the series. But it was just the one scene, and only 2 people.... I, personally, don't read for all the gun bunny stuff. I LIKE plot, I LIKE action/adventure, but all the technical details just aren't my thing.

But, apparently, everyone else here is thrilled with something more intellectual to discuss than my silly ficcage, so, completely ignore me. ^__^;;;
check the preview above
I saw the preview. I'm curious as to how you're characterizing those 2. I've not read any of the manga, novels, etc. so I only know them by what's in the series. I'm interested in seeing more rounded versions of their characters and friendship. :)
@Katyusha
Thanks for the GunBunny expansion, but that's why there's
Google you know :-D
I took one look at it, went, ummmmm, I'd have to go back 2 pages, pull up the fic read a line and translate. No thanks.

Sorry.
I DID already admit to being nearly ignorant of the Russian language, right? :? Sue me...
Don't mind Kat. He needs to go write his own glorious story full of technical details all in the Russian language so that he can finally have something worth reading.

Write for yourself, I always say. If others like it, great. If they don't, well, then, that's their prerogative. But it doesn't mean they're right.

*hugs Helly-chan*

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Hey BR!! *hugs back*

Yeah, I guess you're right in that there was nothing in chp 3 to anchor
it to FMP, so I may have thrown off a few ppl. Blame my insane need
this chp to go GunBunny crazy!! :lol: I think I got it out of my system...
I think...

// makes personal note to self, include better Janes notes next time
I go GunBunny... heck, I coulda probably made that ref. section
the length of the fic, given the number I had in there, and the amount
of detail I could've included in each entry :-D

Looking forward to more Falter myself, so PLEASE continue it!!!

// *whispers* please post a preview to spark some interest in it again

As for Mardukas & Kalinin, TRYING to get into their heads and figure
them out as ppl. You're right in that the anime never really showed
their personalities much, more cogs in the wheels than anything. But
what I've written so far I'm rather pleased with. I rather like their
relationship, both personal and professional, and how they regard
their charge (Kalinin w/ Souske and Mardukas w/ Tessa) as the
child they never had, which I'm trying to work in as part of what makes
them tick. Mentioned it before that they're at least older than 40, and
no visible family. Where else in this world can they go but MITHRIL?



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Woooo.........this chapter made my head spin, way too much military things I don't get but I guess it goes with building up with what all is about to happen. (I'm prior military myself but I didn't care to research alot of the things I was in for) I must say though to see a guy write fics like this is an accomplishment so kudos to you! :clap: :love:
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Taurec wrote:thats IT!! mister .... no more eating tech manuals for breakfast .. ;)
But I *DONT* eat tech manuals for breakfast....


...I have them for lunch and midnight snacking.


BR - Suit yourself.

HELLFIRE - You could just ask me to do it. I have electronic copies of quite a few entries. And to tell the truth, with all those units you got involved, it would have been as long as ALL of the fanfics we've had so far put together.

On another note, you mispelled "Sergeant" and "Sousuke" a few times in the last chapter.
Remember kids, trying to start Armageddon is dangerous. Do not try it at home.

[14:57] Silver Lynxy: Ack. You couldn't see that?
[14:57] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: Nope, cant see a thing.
[14:57] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: Not using MSN remember?
[14:57] Silver Lynxy: Oh right. You're one of those Trillian people, aren't you?
[14:58] Katyusha [Love Through Superior Firepower]: trillian people? =.= What are we, an ethnicity now?
[15:00] Silver Lynxy: Yes. An evil race.

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<grin> ..

electronic copies ...... wanna share ??
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"Can I help you?, "you know this section is.." she broke off her sentence as the man walked towards her and nodded, "I think you can Captain".
Tessa looked down, "I haven't been called Captain in 4 years," Wha..what do you want?"
He gave her a devious grin, "I'm here to make sure you keep your promise."
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█ Raaaaaaaaawr!!!
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@Beckster
Thx for sticking it out so far with my fic, 'specially Ch 3. Seems unless
you're a GunBunny, it'll either a) confuse the heck outta ya, b) drive
you nuts, c) drive you to confusion, d) combination of the above
or e) all of the above :lol:

Really glad that you enjoyed the headlock scene so much! I LOVED
writing that out! Now I wish I knew someone at GONZO who would
kindly animate it so we could watch it :-D And if you're wondering,
Chidori's definately NOT in a dream at the start of Chap 2. She's just
left her apartment after her reunion with Souske, and well, let's just
say her head's a bit in the clouds after that. Kyouko interrupting that
to wish her a good morning didn't help though...

@Katyusha
You probably have a stack of tech manuals in your pantry for 'in-between
meals snacking,' right?

And you just HAD to go nitpick with spelling again, right? Sergeant is
inexcuseable, but Sousuke is... I HATE translating from Kanji to an
english-sounding equivalent, 'cuz it's such a pain! The spelling for
Chung Jung is a close approximation of what it sounds like in
Mandarin, but I don't think there's an authorative spelling of it
in English.

@All
As promised, the 3 HTML-formatted chaps are uploaded. Respective
addresses are:
http://hellfirenet.canadianwebs.com/Chap01.html
http://hellfirenet.canadianwebs.com/Chap02.html
http://hellfirenet.canadianwebs.com/Chap03.html




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